It’s time for a page one critique, but I’m shaking things up a bit. Today, instead of sharing the first page of a published book, I’m sharing a submission from a work in progress.
I’ll present the page without comment, then I’ll share my thoughts. Read the first page and consider a few questions:
What do you learn about the protagonist and his situation?
How do you feel about the descriptions?
What questions does this opening raise for you?
Even if you’re not keen on the subject/genre, that’s okay. Review this page for the craft and technique and ignore any typos. Please keep in mind that this is a work in progress, not a polished page that has undergone many revisions and had the benefit of professional editing.